Things to improve on:
-Storyline (No real story here, unless that was intended)
-Sound (Could not here much)
- Music (No form of music witnessed in this clip)
- Animations (Lack of animations)
- Background (Lack of detail, aside from the cobweb)
- Too short
Things I enjoyed:
- Lip Sync (Very well done)
Overall, it could have and still can be re-touched. A lot of things are incomplete and/or missing. Since this was for one of your classes, some of these things are intentional so nothing can be done about it.
Thank you. I respect your review.
-Storyline (None intended)
-Sound (My mic doesn't record well)
-Music (none intended)
-Animation (The only necessary was the lip syncing. Class assignment)
-Background (Ran out of time before project was due)
-The assignment was not supposed to be more than 10 to 15 seconds long.
Things that could use improvements:
%u2022 Could use some animations, I only believe I saw just a few movie clips in this particular piece.
%u2022 Needs a storyline (Unless you intended for this to be random)
%u2022 Theme song starts playing over itself after the credits (1 minute into the credits without replaying, all I hear is a scream of 5 of the same song playing at different intervals
Things I enjoyed:
%u2022 The sound track (Although only one song, it was a good song)
%u2022 Originality (Whether soneone has done this before or not, which I don't suppose so, this is the first time I've seen this video)
For your first attempt, it was a good start. 7/10. Three stars off for the three improvements I have suggested to you.
Aside from the random stuff going on within the film, it was quite decent. 1 star gone for little to no storyline.
Other then that keep up the good work!
lol, yeah. I was expecting people not getting the story line. Some other things in there show canadian objects.
Also, I should've made a story board for that. Thanks for reviewing.
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